Friday, February 11, 2011

Review-Christmas Bounty-Stacey Thompson-Geer



Christmas Bounty
Stacey Thompson-Geer
Wicked Nights
MSRP-0.99
Bought from Bookstrand.
BLURB
Nina is the best at what she does, killing supernatural beings that are causing too much trouble. When she goes after a Vampire with a hidden agenda, she finds a lot more than she expected and a night of passion that may just change her mind.

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*The story just didn't make sense. It was all over the place and there was so much left out, I almost didn't finish because I couldn't get a handle on the heroine. The hero is never really explained except he's some sort of vampire, but he has parties, but he leaves her alone cause she's there to kill him. I was stuck in a kettle of confusion. Regretfully, it's not worth the .99 cents.


*Christmas Bounty really needed a lot more explanation and a good editor. I read two instances of 'once and a while' when the writer really meant 'once in a while'. It's a nit pick, but when you are trying to negotiate what is going on in the story this short the little things stuck out like a big, neon sign. An example was all the grammar errors and I'm no great grammar queen – but if I'm catching them I think a lot of other people will too. Disappointing on many levels.


*I liked the concept, but then it wasn't ever really put together. The author tried, and I give her great credit for that. Still, brevity kicked this story in the teeth. I'd love to know more about the heroine and the group she works for, especially how she can sense paranormals. There's this bit about some Phoenix something or other and that was never explained. I'd also have preferred a concrete plot that wasn't just thrown in there and then forgotten or never explored. And, seriously, I'd have loved to know what his hidden agenda was. Would probably read another story from this author, but I'm not sure if I'll buy a super-short from her.


A quick search of the publisher's website showed they are looking for a copy editor – we do hope they find one.


Unfortunately, this story ranks as an F. Brevity, lack of editing and lack of clarity really hurt this story. We can't, in good conscience, recommend this story.


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3 comments:

  1. Hi. I’m a passerby, reading random review blogs. I want to say—I think you’re using the word “brevity” wrong, and what you really mean is something like “underdeveloped” or “deficient”. You say “brevity” like it’s a bad thing, and I keep thinking, “Since when is brevity a bad thing? I thought brevity meant ‘to cleverly use few words to say a lot’.”

    Sorry if in your region of the world, “brevity” means a bad thing. Does “brevity” mean a bad thing in your region?

    Not trying to be weird about words; just very bugged about the 3 brevity’s on this page.

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  2. Actually - no, brevity doesn't mean a bad thing because we've read many short and super-short stories that we have loved. Normally the readers use it for underdeveloped, lacking depth and such. I will make them aware of your comment.

    Thanks for stopping by.

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  3. Hi,

    I ran across this blog while I was searching myself for unknown reviews. :)

    I am sorry that you didn't care for it. Looking back on the story there are things that should have been explained further and I'm sorry that those explanations didn't make it into the final product.

    This short look at the Pheonix order really did open some doors into a more complex world. I have decided recently to really explore it more with a different book inspired by the order itself.

    We have improved editing since this was published a few months ago. I am sorry that this story fell flat for you and hope that you will consider other works that may be more of your liking.

    Please feel free to read a short story that is free at this moment called The Gatekeeper Series: Lynn so as you may see that while this story was not as good as it could have been, I believe some of my other work may be more to your liking. Please stop by All Romance Ebooks and download this free one to give me a second chance.
    As always, thank you for reading my story and for taking the time to review it.

    Stacey Thompson-Geer

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